final media product finished- Planet Mary

story board improved.

improvement on SCRIPT

 After reading thoroughly through our script several times with my group we all desided that our script was unsatisfactory and therefore decided to improve it in order to make our film opening more successful.


In the school


Long SHOT


Geeky girl walking through corridor carrying books.


Straight cut


Close up shot


Mary


(Narration) Ok, that’s me over there, living and surviving the reality of a harsh planet, we all call “School.”


Straight cut


Medium shot


Where we are all fed from a golden fountain of knowledge. Yeah right! School is just a place where a jedi like myself cannot be with a guy like that leaving us to fight the most important battle in the world, loving someone who will never love you back.


Straight cut


Long shot




Straight cut


Medium shot


Maybe I am going a bit overboard or maybe I am not, but anyway my name is Mary Watkins and yes if you have’nt already guessed that I am utterly in love with scott… scott williams.
Straight cut


Close up shot


(Standing in a striking pose) Scott Williams is seen talking on the phone


Long shot


Straight cut


Mary is seen staring at Scott


Oliver walks down corridor and interrupts Mary day dreaming


Earth calling Mary, Earth to Mary, is it safe to land yet?


MARY


Do you come in peace and carry Scott Williams?


OlLIVER


I come with love and M&Ms will that do?


MARY


I guess it would be rude to say no.


Both characters laugh, Mary snorts.


Mary


OLIVER


Anyway, I’ll see you in science, Feel the force


Oliver holds up his hand


MARY


Feel the force


Mary holds up her hand


Close up shot


Both characters high five


Male voice


Shouts: heads up


Camera tilts to ceiling


Mary is seen looking up to the ceiling


Camera crane


High angle point of view shot


Mary falls to the ground


STRAIGHT CUT


CLOSE UP SHOT OF MARY ON THE GROUND


Low angle point of view show


Close up shot


Reaches out to Mary's hand


Camera zooms out


Medium shot


Let me help you up.


Beat


Straight cut


Medium low angle point of view shot




EXTREME CLOSE UP SHOT
low angle point of view shot of Mary


Long shot of Scott walking away


Straight cut
Medium shot of Mary

New Project 10

New Project 10

Storyboard

Script

In the school

long SHOT

Geeky girl walking through crowded corridor carrying books.

straight cut

close up shot

Mary

(Narration) Ok, that's me over there

straight cut

medium shot

living and surviving

straight cut

long shot

in the realms of a concrete

CAMERA ZOOMS TO A CLOSE UP SHOT OF STUDENTS BEHAVING LIKE ANIMALS

jungle, where we are all fed from that

straight cut to a teacher talking expressively

medium shot

golden fountain of knowledge.

straight cut

(pause) Yeah, right school is just a place where our captors cage us, and leave us to fight the most important battle in the world.

jump cut to a star wars clip of a star ship

Star ship to Star ship.

straight cut

medium shot

Maybe I am going a bit overboard or maybe I am not, but anyway my name is Mary Watkins and I am totally and utterly in love with

straight cut

Scott Williams

close up shot

Scott Williams is seen in slow motion drinking a bottle of water

camera zooms out

long shot

straight cut

point-of-view shot(long shot)

Mary is seen staring at Scott

Olivia

Earth calling Mary, Earth to Mary, is it safe to land yet?

Olivia is not seen in this shot

jump cut

Medium shot of Mary and Olivia

MARY

Do you come in peace and carry Scott Williams?

OLIVIA

I come with love and skittles will that do?

MARY

I guess it would be rude to say no.

Both characters laugh, Mary snorts.

Mary

Marry me, Marry me Mr Scott Williams, take my hand.

OLIVIA

In five years time he will say yes Mary Watkins, yes.

MARY

Do you really think that? I do hope your right.

OLIVIA

Feel the force

Olivia holds up her hand

MARY

Feel the force

Mary holds up her hand

Close up shot

Both characters high five

male voice

off shot

Shouts

camera tilts to ceiling

Heads up!

Mary is seen looking up to the ceiling

camera crane

high angle point of view shot

Mary falls to the ground revealing her underwear

CAMERA CRANE

Long shot

STRAIGHT CUT

CLOSE UP SHOT OF MARY ON THE GROUND

voice

Wow embarrassing, much?

MARY

straight cut

high angle point of view shot

Narration

Now this would be the moment in my life in which a) wished I had participated in more P.E lessons and my reaction time was better and b) earth would banish me to outer Galatia. But fortunately neither of them wishes had to happen.

straight cut

low angle point of view show

Scott

Hey, you alright

Straight cut

close up shot

Reaches out to Mary's hand

camera zooms out

medium shot

let me help you up.

Beat

Mary, right?

straight cut

medium low angle point of view shot

Mary stares in an embrace

straight cut

long shot

taylor

She stuck in a time warp,

JUMP CUT

MEDIUM SHOT

everyone look.She borrows her Grannies underwear,

Straight cut

close up low angle point of view shot

Granny pants, granny pants!

CAMERA TRACKS THE EXPRESSIONS IN THE CROWD

CLOSE UP SHOT

EXTREME CLOSE UP SHOT

Everyone laughs, except Scott and Olivia

straight cut

low angle point of view shot of mary

voice

What is she wearing, eurgh?

straight cut

close up shot

Mary

Welcome to inside the cage the place where you experience the best and worst days of your life all rolled up into one.

straight cut

high angle point of view shot of teenage crowd laughing

Well this as you can evidently see is my best day so far.